This was a really good piece, Christine. Your use of visual and tactile imagery is enviable.
Structurally, the narration flowed smoothly and characters were developed just enough to feeling some emotional resonance with them.
That part where you wrote: “Mostly, it was how she felt when his hands climbed up her back. It’s nice to be absorbed by another” - truer words have never been spoken!
Thanks for the comments and for reading! I'm going to give a few more weeks and then come back for a final edit... I think I need 1-2 more scenes to build up the payout of the story.
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Thanks for reading!
This was a really good piece, Christine. Your use of visual and tactile imagery is enviable.
Structurally, the narration flowed smoothly and characters were developed just enough to feeling some emotional resonance with them.
That part where you wrote: “Mostly, it was how she felt when his hands climbed up her back. It’s nice to be absorbed by another” - truer words have never been spoken!
Thanks for the comments and for reading! I'm going to give a few more weeks and then come back for a final edit... I think I need 1-2 more scenes to build up the payout of the story.